Kylie J

Chapter 1 "There's no denying the Kravitz," Sam declared to no one in particular, cranking up the Honda's radio dial. The wind kicked his shaggy, brown bangs back as it ...

QiGuaiGongFu, thank you for the best crit I have received for this story. I went back and changed most of the things you mentioned....I have a couple things I left ...

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Well, hopefully, you got an A on it 'cause I thought it was pretty awesome. Well-written, varied use of examples, interesting subject.....nice job.

Thanks. I'm mostly into fantasy/sci-fi, but I like thrillers too, and sometimes religion.

Seeing as it's sorta late (which means my brain has gone all fuzzy), I won't try to critique it other than to say it was really great! I loved the ...

Wow. THANK YOU SNOINK. Rather than just telling me what needed to be changed, you explained why too, which helped me see a lot of my mistakes in taking the ...

yes, that punctuation definitely helps a lot. :)

Reichieru, I agree that my way of telling this slowed down the storytelling, but it's the only way I could fit what needed to be told. I know this part ...

You may want to add a link to the story itself. For people that don't know, it's in the Other Fiction forum. And yes, I think you should continue it.

Oh yeah, I wrote to DJ MacHale too! You're right, not only do we get replies, but they're personal. I told him I want to be a writer and his ...

Thanks! I'm glad you liked it. I took your advice to finish it with Mr. Litter, so here's the end. What Margaret Moore did not know was this little fact: ...

Haha, yes, addictive, aren't they? I'd say my favorite is The Lost City of Faar (#2), probably because I'd love to flume to Cloral any day now, but The Never ...